I was running through the darkness, tripping and stumbling my way through the trees. Though light filtered through the canopy above me, the darkness enveloped me. I could barely make way through the twisting, winding path. The mulch beneath my feet was still soft from being freshly placed. The air was thick. It felt as though I swimming through it and I was drenched. The heat was incredible but rapidly falling. A veil of gray clouds was casting a shadow that feigned nightfall.
Then I broke from the forest's edge. The ominous glow of the veiled sun hinted to an incoming storm. Thundered roared and rumbled in the distance. I broke from the trail to the cold, hard, unforgiving cement and raced toward cover. Then the heavens broke loose. Rain and lightning struck and lashed the earth with extreme ferocity. My first run on the Coach Dupe Trail had been cut short.
The writing is very dramatic and interesting. It feels like an epic poem. I like the way that it's so descriptive.
ReplyDeleteI love the way you write. At first I thought you were lost in the forest or running from something, but is turned out to be just a normal experience. It was so descriptive, I just wanted to keep reading.
ReplyDeleteThanks! I appreciate your opinions! The concept is easy enough. You take the scene and eliminate all personal info. So it's just the experiences your left with. Describe those with everything in your arsenal. When your done you left with a near perfect description of the scene and just fill in the personal stuffs.
ReplyDeleteI Thought that at the beginning it was going to be a fiction story, and it ended being a cross-country run.,
ReplyDeleteAlex
This was a really great post. I thought it was going to be a story you were writing but then it was actually your life in a cross country run. This was a really good detailed writing Jacob, greta job!!
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